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    dots Submission Name: Real Thingsdots
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    Author: ollie_wicked
    ASL Info:    27?FEarth
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 320/200/91
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1085
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 305



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    dotsReal Thingsdots
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    Did you ever have a lover
    Who actually loved you?
    Did you ever have a boyfriend
    Who was actually your friend?
    Did you ever see a picture perfect family
    Who were actually perfect?
    Did you ever have a welcome mat on your door
    When you actually hated company?




    Submitted on 2006-07-24 22:06:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You have got some talent here. Very nice rehtorical questions. I tend to do that in my writing sometimes it is good when you can pull it off. And you can pull it off. Keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by MaxHam | [ Reply to This ]


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