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Loves Plea


Author: od9.1.04
ASL Info:    15/f/oh
Elite Ratio:    1.68 - 18 /38 /19
Words: 147
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Loves Plea



At night I am awake
At day i just ponder..
Of how much love you make
And how you make me wonder.

Your smile embraces
Me in your warmth of love..
With you our love retraces
the flight of a peaceful dove.

You're on my mind
I can't get you off..
Our love is like time
You can't turn it off.

I made my vow
To you I'm true..
Can you see now
That I 'm in love with you?

Together
is the way it should be..
I'll stay with you forever
I'll be your everything.

The clock is running
It's my only chance..
To tell what my mind's strumming
And make our future plans.

At night I yearn
At day I plead..
To show you my concern
And you're all that I need.<3









Submitted on 2006-07-24 22:17:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  hey!!! yay first commenter!! i love that!! this is good!!! the rhymin was good! its not as good as some of the other few poems ive read of urs! but its still good! nice flow good rhyming!! it was consistent!! good job!
~akaila~
| Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by secretmystery_1 | [ Reply to This ]


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