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    dots Submission Name: This Morningdots
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    Author: sunset
    ASL Info:    21/F/Melb, Australia
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 76/46/32
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       What can I say my boyfriend is lovely x


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    dotsThis Morningdots
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    This morning I woke,
    Like so many others
    With your arms around me
    Your hands on my skin
    Your whisper in my ear

    I try to tell myself
    I must never forget
    The warmth of your body
    The taste of your lips
    The way you hold me
    So close against you

    I try to tell myself
    Not to take you forgranted
    Once there were days
    Without you in my life
    When mornings meant waking
    Into another empty day

    This morning I woke,
    I promised myself
    I would hold onto you
    With the strength of my soul
    Forever remembering
    You are the light in my life







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      This made me think of my boyfriend so much...every moment we spend together is so precious..because he is in the military and we don't see each other very often..so your words in this poem about trying to remember every second and the way he feels next to you is what I do every time I'm with my boyfriend. I can't wait until the day where I can be like the person in this poem and look back on the days when we weren't together...and know that's why I have to remember every day that he truly is the light of my life. Thanks for writing this..it was beautiful. ~hailie~
    | Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]


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