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Submission Name: Words He Never Said dots

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Author:	sunset
ASL Info:	21/F/Melb, Australia
Elite Ratio:	4.45 - 76/46/32
Words:	121

Class/Type:	Poetry/Longing
Total Views:	868
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	801

Description:
This is from a year ago when life was a little more confusing...

Words He Never Said dots

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Snuggle into his arms
Close your eyes tight
Wish that you felt safe
As you stay with him tonight

Know you have no reason
To believe in his soft touch
Or the kisses on your neck
That you love so much

Looking into his eyes
There are no more boundaries
No secrets left to hide
Entwine your hand in his

Hearing all his whispers
Trying to forget
The things he’ll never say
And the words you regret

Sleepy Sunday morning
Hold him close to you
Don’t think about anything
There’s nothing you can do

Watch him leave for work
Stay lying in his bed
Dream of all the little things
The words he never said

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Eh, I don't really like this poem all that much to be honest.
I think, for the most part, I can't relate.
The wording was nice, as was the flow.
But I found it to be kind of boring and blan.
I just didn't feel like there was much depth to it.

I did however like the last stanza. It left me feeling like the person in the peom. Left alone, with no good-byes.
| Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by Coffee Brake | [ Reply to This ]
Eh, I don't really like this poem all that much to be honest.
I think, for the most part, I can't relate.
The wording was nice, as was the flow.
But I found it to be kind of boring and blan.
I just didn't feel like there was much depth to it.

I did however like the last stanza. It left me feeling like the person in the peom. Left alone, with no good-byes.
| Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by Coffee Brake | [ Reply to This ]

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