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    dots Submission Name: Words He Never Saiddots
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    Author: sunset
    ASL Info:    21/F/Melb, Australia
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 76/46/32
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       This is from a year ago when life was a little more confusing...


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    dotsWords He Never Saiddots
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    Snuggle into his arms
    Close your eyes tight
    Wish that you felt safe
    As you stay with him tonight

    Know you have no reason
    To believe in his soft touch
    Or the kisses on your neck
    That you love so much

    Looking into his eyes
    There are no more boundaries
    No secrets left to hide
    Entwine your hand in his

    Hearing all his whispers
    Trying to forget
    The things heíll never say
    And the words you regret

    Sleepy Sunday morning
    Hold him close to you
    Donít think about anything
    Thereís nothing you can do

    Watch him leave for work
    Stay lying in his bed
    Dream of all the little things
    The words he never said




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    ||| Comments |||
      Eh, I don't really like this poem all that much to be honest.
    I think, for the most part, I can't relate.
    The wording was nice, as was the flow.
    But I found it to be kind of boring and blan.
    I just didn't feel like there was much depth to it.

    I did however like the last stanza. It left me feeling like the person in the peom. Left alone, with no good-byes.
    | Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by Coffee Brake | [ Reply to This ]
      Eh, I don't really like this poem all that much to be honest.
    I think, for the most part, I can't relate.
    The wording was nice, as was the flow.
    But I found it to be kind of boring and blan.
    I just didn't feel like there was much depth to it.

    I did however like the last stanza. It left me feeling like the person in the peom. Left alone, with no good-byes.
    | Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by Coffee Brake | [ Reply to This ]


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