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    Author: sunset
    ASL Info:    21/F/Melb, Australia
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 76/46/32
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    The moments crash
    Into this infinity of time
    So many words and thoughts
    Schedules and dreams
    No time to walk
    Barley room to breathe
    Cannot be consumed
    By my drive and desire
    It all bleeds together
    Falls apart and sticks together
    With the tiny basics
    That I cling too
    He has become my
    Feet when I cannot find
    The ground beneath me
    But what happens when we
    Fall shatteringly apart?
    Who will help me walk?
    Cannot place this burden
    Upon his confused mind
    He knows he holds my heart
    He cannot throw it away
    Yet he tries so hard to ignore
    How real this all is
    Itís all too fast
    Time is moving now
    More than I can grasp
    It all slips away
    And comes back to me
    In a million wonderful moments
    But if I donít slow down
    They will become seconds
    In this infinity
    Slowly drift away




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