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poetry doesnt rhyme with perfect.


Author: fbeat
ASL Info:    15/female/ca
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poetry doesnt rhyme with perfect.



your so poetically correct.
the way you rhyme,
its so substantially direct.
i like the way you make it flow.
it gives off the right effect.
makes me want to worship you
thats the least you'd expect
but you cant predict.
where its going to next.
here.
here.
there.
where.
the judge calls the final verdict.
you cant master poetry.
theres no such thing as perfect.




Submitted on 2006-07-24 23:50:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  So very very true. Poetry is an individual expression, each writer has a different style, and a different rhythm.
"There is no such thing as perfect"
I really liked that line a lot. In fact I liked the whole poem that much I'm going to add it to my faves list. The first one I've put on there :) Nice work. Keep it up, and let your talent flow.
x poetic harmony x
| Posted on 2006-07-29 00:00:00 | by Poétic Harmonie | [ Reply to This ]
  finally someone is telling everyone the truth lol. this was hot and i'ma add it to my favorites. It was fast but not too fast, and i liked the message it sent out.

Lady D
| Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow. This was very fast paced but it wasn't too fast. I followed it perfectly I especially loved the end when you said "There is no such thing as perfect" that is so true! Very good, keep up the good work!
| Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by MaxHam | [ Reply to This ]


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