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    dots Submission Name: Lies and Deceptionsdots
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    Author: Kimmy
    ASL Info:    18/f/Ar
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 18/32/20
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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       I wrote this tonight, because of a guy that i was with for a long time told me so many lies and tells me that i was only sex to him... how voilated, and used i felt.. and still do...


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    You’re filled with only lies and deceptions,
    You never even mentioned,
    That this would be the outcome
    That my whole insides would be completely numb…
    Nothing to feel but the shattered pieces that tear at my flesh
    You created my Emotional distress
    And you walk by me with a look of dismay,
    Like I’ll get over it in a couple of days
    But what you can’t distinguish
    Is what I wish.
    I wish everything upon you
    Every heart wrenching lie,
    Where you’re to the point of wanting to die
    From every meaningless word that falls
    I want you to feel it all…




    Submitted on 2006-07-25 00:50:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is such a sad poem. One thing I can't stand about our generation of guys is our uncaring of our girls and women. Some of us treat them (or you all) as though you are objects of our pleasure and never take the time to even wonder what you feel and it is you girls who suffer the heartache. I hope everyting worked out with this situation and I hope that you find a great guy .

    much LOVE
    James
    | Posted on 2006-08-01 00:00:00 | by James Reyna | [ Reply to This ]
      though youre angry you seem to give them the victorry. you ve showed them theyve won by tearing out your heart, ny you wishing them the worst. your rationality seems to be fading or your just a fragile little girl. use it i say. dont give in theres pain everywhere you look noones says they love you and means it. theres no such thing as love anymore, just infatuation for a time. those whove been married for what seem like eons, when you talk to them they say love but you can tell its out of obligation and low self esteem. better luck next time...
    | Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by blackhart | [ Reply to This ]
      I think in this one you sacrificed anger for quality...which I understand...but because of that, its not as good as it could be...

    but don't worry bout that dude, he'll get his when it comes to'em...
    | Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]


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