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    dots Submission Name: Untitleddots

    Author: isselman2001
    Elite Ratio:    5.38 - 37/47/46
    Words: 241
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 864
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    If there's one thing I'd adore, it's to wrap myself in lore,
    And with the Earth's plutonian shore, to be parted, evermore.
    And to swing my tail with ease in the coming winter breeze,
    And to fly up in the air like I just don't have a care,
    And to swing upon a vine just to seek a valentine,
    And see if the mighty myths are really true or make beliefs:
    Fly upon Aladdin's rug, and put the world inside a jug,
    Swing the jug so far and wide and turn misery on its side;
    Oh, to swing upon a star and leave worries in a jar!
    Look past mountains my own height,
    And to see the blue delight,
    And the star that's blazing bright!
    Oh, Mighty Heavens! What a sight!
    Breathe in mountain's morning dew with a wondrous "a-choo!"
    Let the tables turn with ease, and bring misery to its knees.
    Take a peanut-butter bread and spread jelly on instead.
    Take the candy colored hills and flow champagnes in the rills.
    Oh, to swing like lemon pie over fresh blueberry skies,
    To be seen up oh so high, spreading miles across the sky --
    Seeing little birds that soar o'er the night Atlantian shore
    And the little birds that sing in a most familiar ring
    And the fears to leave behind and atop Mount Rushmore find
    All the things that man is blind to on the Earth!

    Submitted on 2006-07-25 01:06:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ooooh what a captivating write...I have to add apart from the sagacious craft, it had an incredible vivid imagery to it. That I found really amazing, I have to say it has that element of escapism to it, not that its a bad thing but it was so liberating to read this piece. It was a lovely meditation....since my day has'ne so wonderful but after this encounter, it has uplifted my spirit...A worthwhile piece indeed. There was'nt a particular verse that I felt was better than the rest however the following verse serinaded me "Take a peanut-butter bread and spread jelly on instead...YUMMMMMY" Thank you for sharing..Be happy...NOBANTU
    | Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by Nobantu | [ Reply to This ]

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