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    dots Submission Name: a selfish kissdots
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    Author: LameMansTerms
    ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 713/1012/165
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1383
    Average Vote:    3.5000
    Bytes: 386



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       I don't know where it's coming from?


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    dotsa selfish kissdots
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    a selfish kiss


    She looked at me
    from across the room.
    The smoke doesn’t cloud
    any of her beauty.
    Strangers not in the way
    of me feeling stranger
    than I ever thought possible for me.
    100 people but not one exists.
    For that moment it was just us
    who shared a kiss.

    lamemansterms




    Submitted on 2006-07-25 07:11:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      ooh, i like this one. it's short but sweet. i'm a sucker for poems like this. i love all the romance, and kisses and fireworks...you get the picture. i don't think it needs anything else, its you, and her, everything else fades away...i think this is gorgeous!
    yeah, me again!!
    whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-10-19 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      hey where's the end...? damn this is like a sandwich that i take a bite of and somebody ushers it a way... where's the beef, chicken, turkey something kid! Don't leave me hanging... give me the aftermath.
    | Posted on 2006-07-28 00:00:00 | by JTrickly | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmm very enticing piece. I gotta say it has that captivating element. Very beautifully writen and I appreciate the simplicity of your piece. My favourite verse " For that moment it was just us
    who shared a kiss". There's something very moving about that line....A meticulous write...Thank you for sharing....BE HAPPY...Nobantu
    | Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by Nobantu | [ Reply to This ]
      Whoa...dude...this was...well...totally not what I expected.

    I will totally admit...I didn't look at the author until after I had clicked on the title and it brought me to this. From what I read from you before...this is a very different kind of piece comming from you isn't it?

    All I can really say is that...it isn't really a shelfish kiss...do you really want to share it with all of the other sleeze balls in the bar? (lol...couldn't resist). I love the amount of honesty that came out in this. And...I really love that moment...when you two are the only two people in the bar. It's just awesome.

    Aynways...that's all I got...ttyl man

    ~Jess
    | Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by shmuzzelle | [ Reply to This ]


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