a selfish kiss -------------------------------------------
a selfish kiss
She looked at me
from across the room.
The smoke doesn’t cloud
any of her beauty.
Strangers not in the way
of me feeling stranger
than I ever thought possible for me.
100 people but not one exists.
For that moment it was just us
who shared a kiss.
ooh, i like this one. it's short but sweet. i'm a sucker for poems like this. i love all the romance, and kisses and fireworks...you get the picture. i don't think it needs anything else, its you, and her, everything else fades away...i think this is gorgeous! yeah, me again!! whirl**
hey where's the end...? damn this is like a sandwich that i take a bite of and somebody ushers it a way... where's the beef, chicken, turkey something kid! Don't leave me hanging... give me the aftermath.
Hmmm very enticing piece. I gotta say it has that captivating element. Very beautifully writen and I appreciate the simplicity of your piece. My favourite verse " For that moment it was just us who shared a kiss". There's something very moving about that line....A meticulous write...Thank you for sharing....BE HAPPY...Nobantu
Whoa...dude...this was...well...totally not what I expected.
I will totally admit...I didn't look at the author until after I had clicked on the title and it brought me to this. From what I read from you before...this is a very different kind of piece comming from you isn't it?
All I can really say is that...it isn't really a shelfish kiss...do you really want to share it with all of the other sleeze balls in the bar? (lol...couldn't resist). I love the amount of honesty that came out in this. And...I really love that moment...when you two are the only two people in the bar. It's just awesome.
Submission Name: a selfish kiss
