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    dots Submission Name: And So...dots
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    Author: Mieko
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 253/209/99
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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       Want to smile and say, "I'm all better."
    But the wounds are still open.
    Open...


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    dotsAnd So...dots
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    Just leave me alone!

    I know Iím a fool,
    But I live for my own dream!
    The further out I go, the more blood lost
    The better off Iíll be in the end
    The orange horizon off in the distance makes an unforgettable promise.

    A thought-
    Forgive me for being straight-forward
    But I the clearer the melody is
    The more we puzzle over the true meaning

    And soÖ

    T r a n s c e n d e n c e
    Do you believe in god? Do you believe in time?
    What is it exactly you believe in?
    Forgive me for thinking someone more than they are-
    I guess you still donít know me after all

    The more I try
    The more I wanna-
    Throw away everything Iíve worked for
    Start over with a clean slate
    ButÖ I pause




    Submitted on 2006-07-25 07:22:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Mieko-chan. lol. Ok it was a good piece, but others comments are true, these things tend to come up alot in life. But it's good that you are able to write them down in such a way. Good read/write.

    Duv
    | Posted on 2008-02-20 00:00:00 | by Draumrkopa | [ Reply to This ]
      You can never move forward unless you take the time to learn from your past. When you completely let go of the past you don't walk forward with the strong mentality. It is all what is needed in order to make progress.

    I liked this write. Even though you are trying to come across as being in a weak moment...you made it very powerful with strength.

    You pause.....why do you pause...maybe because you know that what is ahead and you are maybe hesitating because you are reluctant to let go of the past....maybe?



    Well...either way....I liked this write!

    Much love,

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-08-15 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      hey kid welcome to life...you're gonna hear those staments on you rhead all your life...I know i do...things to ponder while washing, cooking, trying to sleep, in boring meetings, in line at the supermarket...such of and so on.
    | Posted on 2006-07-28 00:00:00 | by JTrickly | [ Reply to This ]
      Ohhhh...Mieko-san...food must not be stirred in wok all time. One must also eat food at precisely the wite time in order to gain pwoper nurishment...and maintain a healthy intestinal tract system. Food that stay in wok too long cause smoke alarms to ring.

    Nice random thoughts...thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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