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My Eveything

Author: od9.1.04
ASL Info:    15/f/oh
Elite Ratio:    1.68 - 18 /38 /19
Words: 79
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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My Eveything

He means the sky...
he's my everything above.

He means the earth...
he's my peaceful dove.

He means the nurishment...
he's my life support.

He means the trail...
he's my partner with who I explore.

He means the sun...
he's my life in the sky so blue.

He means the stars...
he's my wish come true.

He means the oceans...
he's my fish of dreams.

He means the universe...
he's my everything.

Submitted on 2006-07-25 09:43:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this is a good poem. the meaning was easy to understand. the only thing i wasn't really into was the fact that you wuold sometimes ryhme and the change to just thoughts.but other than that it was great.

| Posted on 2006-08-01 00:00:00 | by bbcherry | [ Reply to This ]

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