Lonely Life

Author: od9.1.04 ASL Info:    15/f/oh Elite Ratio:    1.68 - 18 /38 /19 Words: 81

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Lonely Life

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I didn't see... Why people hated him so. Looking back I can't believe... That he had to go. He had so much going... A new love in sight. His true colors showing... The real him in light. They laughed at him... They called him names. How could they see what they did? They all are the ones to blame. He took his own... Life is now at end. Now it is known... He didn't have a friend.

Submitted on 2006-07-25 10:04:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I like this i do its deep.. discussing sucide and teasing.. in which everyone can relate to .. to certain extents.. some more than others. But I feel it should be longer. Not at all am I trying to say is not any good. But I feel it would be better! ~*Jackie*~

| Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]

This barely scraped the surface. That's what made it so touching. People really do this. And you ended an entire argument by saying only what you said. This is why it happened and that's all there is to it. I really liked it.

| Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by deadbeat_88 | [ Reply to This ]

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