Description: well, this is all, about how I'm moving to Missouri, aka, Misery... I'll be able to get a dog and have a new room, but right now my house is full of boxes...
my moving room -------------------------------------------
Walking to the hangman's noose
Are walls ready to be painted white
To be stripped of all possession
Void of coloured light
As the executioner I wield an ax of bristles
They're flaming antique white
In my house of impersonal boxes
This is quite the sordid fight
For I don't want to cease the aesthetics
But the posters have been packed
And for a silly security deposit
Up against bare walls I'm backed
I’ll get another room, somewhere
And the posters will get unpacked
And all the boxes, so high
Impersonally they'll be unstacked
Material values compacted
Opened like treasure chests each one
All just waiting to be rearranged
I want a window that won't face the sun
Was hoping for a garden, maybe
A place to race off and jump, swim
What colours should I paint my new walls?
What colour should I paint the trim?
I suppose it doesn't really matter
So long as the music is loud as right now
Jim Morrison remains, tacked on the ceiling
He's angry he has to come down
Leaving my uprooted mushrooms here
Hopefully I can grow some anew
Alice is staying behind with fun times
Depressing how I don’t have a clue
Incense will smoke up the air in Misery
And a bit of the bench shop will follow
A furry best friend waits unknowing
Near the far side of Misery's hollow
Hi Rue..its been a while, but i just decided to stop by and read some of your work. I really like this poem, shows all the emotion that follows when moving to a new place.
Material values compacted
Opened like treasure chests each one
All just waiting to be rearranged
I want a window that won't face the sun
Absolutely brilliant lines, especially the last one. Keep it up. Hope to read more soon.
Now, first off, I have a question. What's the proper way to spell color? I see lots of people around here spelling it with a 'u' and I was always taught that it didnt have a 'u'. I cant find the word colour in any dictionary either. Just wondering if you knew?
I am a sucker for writing that can capture a feeling or emotion and "take the reader there", as this one did. The ending wasnt particularly strong though. Maybe swapping the last two stanzas? Hmmm...I dunno...just rambling and thinking.
Anyway, I liked the Morrison part, that was very good.
Submission Name: my moving room
