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    dots Submission Name: Broken Angel Wingsdots

    Author: CynicalxDreamer
    ASL Info:    31/m/7th Level of Hell
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 40/100/64
    Words: 284
    Class/Type: Poetry/Gothic
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       I remembered the video for Staind - Epiphany.

    It is perhaps to me, one of the most beautiful videos I have ever seen in my life and will remain so to this day within my heart.

    It is perhaps the only video that can always make me cry when I watch it.

    So...in tribute of listening to a combination of Epiphany and Outside....it led me to this.

    Lately, I've been having a reoccurence of this God-hating thing. I don't Hate God. I'm going to explain this. My poems are not meant to miscontrue that idea. I just don't believe he's looking out for me or anyone. But that goes into my whole theological outlook and I don't have time to type that all out.

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    dotsBroken Angel Wingsdots

    Gossamer wings of black crystals
    Crimson stains of dried tears
    Veil of a wedding dress
    That never made it to the alter

    Colored black for the grave
    Rain staining the ground brown
    As her guests are now her mourners
    Saying goodbye to the pale bride

    Hushed sobs as they leave the site
    The gravedigger paying his respects
    Even saying it was a tragedy
    Before he begins his work

    The moonlight night of mist and fog
    As the broken angel rises from soil
    Gossamer wings of black glowing
    Under the lunar beams of Heaven

    As she stares up, fingers outstretched
    Reaching for a God that is uncaring
    Red streaks sliding anew from her eyes
    A silent plea of why she was hated

    Only to hear nothing but the rain
    Only to feel nothing but the cold
    Only to realize nothing but pain
    And only to know...

    Only to know...

    That was all there was.

    Submitted on 2006-07-25 13:26:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I absolutely loved it....The first stanza, at least, is pure perfection. I agree with jennah that it was really sad...but the sad poems are the ones I like most...they're the ones that have the ability to transmit the deepest feelings...I disagree with her on the God thing, though....you have every right to feel abandoned...we all do, mostly in cases like you've presented in this poem...and if there's anyone actually giving a damn, we can't know it...no need to feel guilty for a mere guess.

    Overall thumbs-up!

    | Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by Angie444 | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem makes me sad. Don't get me wrong. It's an excellent poem and I really like the attention to detail that you show throughout. It just makes me sad because I believe that God is alway there and that He loves us all. I believe that even when things are hard, especially when things are hard, He is watching over us and wishing that we would try things His way. ~jennah
    | Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by jennah | [ Reply to This ]

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