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    dots Submission Name: Lady Abyssdots
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    Author: darkeveris
    ASL Info:    19/F/Someplace silent
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 34/62/38
    Words: 47
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 776
    Average Vote:    3.5000
    Bytes: 430



    Description:
       This is a repost I had this one up when I first joined. In loving memory of Cassy


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    dotsLady Abyssdots
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    Cold tears of pain,
    On this
    Porcelain raveness.
    Frosty blue skin,
    Devoured this
    Child of sadness.
    Death snuck in,
    Plagued this
    Dark little goddess.
    Blood lust began,
    Transformed this
    Toxic vampires.
    Voices then slain,
    Evaporate this
    Velvet songstress.
    Forever laying in sin,
    Stained this
    Necrophiliac so modest.




    Submitted on 2006-07-25 15:01:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This has to be some of the deepest poetry Ive read in a while
    You almost seem to be screaming for help with your words
    Im sorry you seem sad but trust me if you find the Positive to the negatives in your life you are half way to happiness
    You have a very good knack of describing your pain in words
    You definately have talent!!!
    God Bless
    Ron

    please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my poetry and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-08-09 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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