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    dots Submission Name: I Guessdots
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    Author: b_v_grant
    ASL Info:    23/M/Jamaica
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 125/118/69
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 742
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1253



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    dotsI Guessdots
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    Verse 1

    I wanted you
    I wanted no one else
    I thought it through
    I put everyone else to rest
    I got off
    Not knowing where to land
    And i'm hoping
    That you would take my hand

    Chorus

    I guess i wasn't right
    I guess its hard to see
    It didn't matter what i said
    We were in over our heads
    I guess it's why we hurt ourselves for absolutely no reason
    It didn't matter how i tried
    Every single night i cried
    It wasn't bout the pain i feel
    Cuz you weren't good to me
    I guess it's why we hurt ourselves for absolutely no reason

    Verse 2

    Now i see you
    I saw no one else
    And baby it's true
    I'm still in love with you
    Cuz i got off
    Not knowing where to land
    And i'm hoping
    That i wont land into quicksand

    Chorus

    Bridge

    I guess it wasn't what i said
    All the words i want to go away x3
    I thought it was the end
    But it was only the beginning

    It was only the beginning

    Chorus x2




    Submitted on 2006-07-25 18:50:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I got off
    Not knowing where to land
    And i'm hoping
    That you would take my hand

    I like these lines best, very good brokenheart song i can actually see Creed singing this. Been there, you know with who.

    Love, Life & Laughter,
    Jay.
    | Posted on 2006-07-30 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      I really appreciate the honesty... and the rawness of emotion.... I think the words themselves were good choices.... rhyming itself is difficult and still having a rhythm to it.... I think that you achieved that. I am defiantly going to read your other stuff.....
    | Posted on 2006-07-26 00:00:00 | by Cuylia | [ Reply to This ]
      Liked the lyrics, really good. I could really relate to them and that's one reason why I liked them. It seemed like you put some time into it and emotion. I liked the whole pice but what I really liked was the second verse.
    | Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by Foreseer | [ Reply to This ]


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