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    dots Submission Name: stuck-up suicides.dots

    Author: fbeat
    ASL Info:    15/female/ca
    Elite Ratio:    1.45 - 4/19/19
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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       i know it sucks.

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    dotsstuck-up suicides.dots

    suggestive winds suggest your heartless whims
    your not so pretty--
    when you have to fold your cards in

    you said your number one in Gods' eyes
    but who is he to say anything--
    when the clouds block the sky

    Climb the ladder of redemption
    and speed back down to earth
    your high headed decision--
    has left you laid out in the dirt.

    Submitted on 2006-07-26 01:17:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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