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    dots Submission Name: On Soldiersdots
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    Author: Rastine Aristat
    ASL Info:    19/Male/California
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 125/62/31
    Words: 221
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       Another piece I don't have a real title for, so I'll just call it by it's topic. As always suggestions, both for a title and for the piece itself, are appreciated, and if given the choice, be honest before being kind.


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    dotsOn Soldiersdots
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    Our heroes and our demons,
    Are easily the same men,
    When the glory of the victor,
    Grants the right of history;
    Not to read it,
    But write it in the blood of an enemy.

    Revolution and terrorism
    Running hand in hand.
    Can’t you see this freedom fight
    For what it really is?
    A battles not for freedom,
    But to write the world in your image.

    These demons we craft,
    Forged from our brother’s flesh,
    We’re breeding hate,
    Weaving infamy,
    When all he wants,
    Is to live and love,
    Till the land and start a family.

    Never have we fought a man,
    And seen him for what he is,
    He must be a traitor,
    A diabolic anarchist,
    Yet to those he lives for,
    No truer ascent to the divine could be found,
    Than this staunch defender of their wives.

    Heretics they’re dubbed,
    When they’re true to their creed,
    And a consort of the devil,
    When such a word is alien to his ears.
    He fights with a different god in his heart,
    So his war must be a crusade.

    Why can’t a soldier be just a young man,
    Forced to dance to the bureaucrat’s tunes?
    Why must we tarnish his memory,
    With such vile thoughts as insurgency
    When our very empire was cast in traitorous mutiny?




    Submitted on 2006-07-26 06:58:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey Thomas,

    I would recomment the title to be "The Demons We Create" That's the first thing that came to mind when i read this piece...And i do think that although we claim that they are heroes, the truth remains that lives are being taken and we don't even know who those people are...They aren't our enemies as human beings because we don't know them...we have no reason to hate them. They are just people from a country another country is trying to destroy...Yet the price is high and unworthy...It's better to spend the same money and rebuild a better town and try to have some understanding but because so many people are ignorant...this is what we get...

    Sorry, i'm pretty much going nowhere talking about it...It's just that i wrote two pieces about this a long time ago "War zone under construction" and "soldier of ignorance"...I still feel very strongly about this and will always feel that way...

    In terms of your writting, i think you've said everything straight up...no bull going on here...
    THis was hit by a jackpot...
    Take care....
    ~Irina
    | Posted on 2006-07-26 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
      .congs on a philosophy well expressed. i love this line,

    Our heroes and our demons,
    Are easily the same men,

    i t reminds me so much of african leaders, of course am, African. leaders who throw out a dictator and then seem to become good then become the person they threw out or even worse... i have much to say but this is wonderful i must say. keep it up.
    | Posted on 2006-07-26 00:00:00 | by nevender | [ Reply to This ]
      wonderful, why can't a soldier just be a young man?

    Why can’t a soldier be just a young man,
    Forced to dance to the bureaucrat’s tunes?
    Why must we tarnish his memory,
    With such vile thoughts as insurgency
    When our very empire was cast in traitorous mutiny?

    where all this thought seem to appraise the soldier, there are soldiers i have seen do things...

    a title i can't yet put my finger on...
    | Posted on 2006-07-26 00:00:00 | by nevender | [ Reply to This ]


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