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    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 790
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 592



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       i dont realy like the way this turned out and i dont know if it make sense. tell me what u think. thanx.


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    He came to me
    With a broken heart
    I tried to comfort him
    But didn't know how to react

    He's just a friend
    But he wants to be more
    He loves me
    But i love someone else
    He says he will wait
    Wait 'til the end of the earth
    For me

    He says he will be there for me
    And i will be there for him
    But not the way he wants me to be
    We wont be something more
    But he can't accept it

    The only wall between us
    Is the complexity of our love




    Submitted on 2006-07-26 16:53:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey yes it is a little over exagerated but it is really good i like it alot:) i think that it is one of ur best so far and i hope you write more for me to read and comment on.

    -Nick-
    p.s. I'm a princess lmao
    | Posted on 2006-08-08 00:00:00 | by newbee | [ Reply to This ]
      It makes sense, he loves you...but you love him as a friend. Something a lot of people have to deal with. It's hard not to like a friend, for they are exactly what you want in a guy or girl. I don't know any advice for you, just don't let this ruin your friendship. Especially at that age, for friendship can last a long time, but relationships sometimes don't. Good luck!

    ~Kat
    | Posted on 2006-07-27 00:00:00 | by MorbidAngel114 | [ Reply to This ]
      cool

    its about nick and it is pretty good
    | Posted on 2006-07-27 00:00:00 | by Amberger | [ Reply to This ]


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