Description: This is just something that I have had for a while, I wasn't going to share it but I thought that maybe some feed back would be good. This is one of the first ever poems I wrote so I know it is not very good. It's about how my ex used to try and control me with lies and fear but then one day I just had, had enough and it was my turn to make him fear me.
Anyway comments would be great
Tink I am truly glad you were able to fix this problem before it really started to wreck havoc on your life I know thru your writes and comments you are a very Loving person with a LOT of inner strength I Pray The Good Lord continues to Bless You and help you to move forward in life God Bless Your Friend Ron
The third stanza kills this one for me. Uneven line numbers is usually fine, and I'm all for quirky meters. The problem I found was that considering the other three stanzas are have 6 lines-what constitutes the third having only 5. From the standpoint of the poem "I started to change" it can make a little more sense, but if you are going to mess with the stanza's for impact I think something more drastic is needed instead of just dropping a line.