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    dots Submission Name: One True Enemydots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Description:
       This is how I felt one night when I felt no one was there for me.


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    dotsOne True Enemydots
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    One day of desperation,
    I challenged God to a duel;
    I felt like his only abandoned creation,
    Deeply miserable and cruel.

    My bitter heart,
    Showed no remorse,
    I felt a victim to trying hard,
    My counscience had no open doors;
    And my destiny was locked behind bars.

    And so from the sky,
    I heard him weep;
    Feeling this pain of mine,
    Of endless nights;
    That I had to cry myself to sleep.

    I arose the next morning,
    Knowing that God would forgive me,
    That despite without a warning,
    In this lifetime;
    I was...
    My one true enemy.




    Submitted on 2006-07-27 03:19:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a good piece! It describes something that many others go through as well. I've felt the same many times and have to come to the same conclusion as you stated above, and I also realized when I felt that way that others often experience the same things even though we don't think they do.
    | Posted on 2006-07-27 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]


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