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    dots Submission Name: Pilesdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 589
    Average Vote:    1.0000
    Bytes: 631



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       I wote this about a year ago.. although its not in the correct format and what not I still consider it a poem


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    dotsPilesdots
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    With all these crazy people and all these high tech objects I begin to lose myself within all this junk between this pile or the next whether its the people locked up or those who should be its all the same to me. I'm still losing myself between that or this... its all become a mess one huge mess no one is will ing to "clean" up and yet here I am stuck within these piles that I did not create but am left to uncontainate these areas of my life and others. I am expected to make them disapear don't you see this is my job.... this is my job I am here to only vanish these piles away as if I am gifted! PLEASE!




    Submitted on 2006-07-27 05:30:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      What are these piles. What's weighing down on you?
    | Posted on 2006-07-29 00:00:00 | by Gothic Misery | [ Reply to This ]


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