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Monday Evening's Infatuation

Author: James Reyna
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I wrote this poem about this girl I used to like in the 10th grade we during that summer we talked a whole lot and I grew to "love" her but I realized later that it was just an infatuation. But now she's getting married so it's all good. The reason for the "Monday evening" is to represent the measurement of a week being our life span( if anyone doesn't get it than message me:) and even though this was actually monday late afternoon, monday evening sounded better:)

much LOVE

Monday Evening's Infatuation

Monday evening's infatuation
Oh how in my youth
You were my fascination
Long nights I spent thinking of you
We talked, and we shared
And though I was young
I really did care
You told me everything,
All the things that you felt
And all your dreams
But your heart I wanted to myself

Monday evenings infatuation
How foolish like a child
Were my dreams and aspirations
Of living, and holding your hand all the while
And here I am thinking of you
As I lay here tonight in bed
And I know that, this love wasn't true
And I'm happy that you will be wed
Now I wish you all the best
"Best wishes" is all I can say
But if you'll excuse me I must get rest
For Tuesday is another day.

Submitted on 2006-07-27 10:54:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This poem is so true. I'm in the 10th grade now so even though most kids when their parents say, "Oh your too young to know what love truely is." and the kids get mad and say,"Oh but I do love them!" I know that we are too young. But, can you really put an age limit on love? Do you have to be older than twenty or thirty to know just what love is? Why couldn't you be a teenager and love? Simple answer, just what your poem says. Most teens aren't mature enough to understand love. One day they're "in love" with someone and the next they're with someone else. Being a teenager and knowing that I realize just like every other teen, I do as well say "I love someone". Infact, I'm still "infatuated" with my ex. I'm sure that some day I'll look back on him just like you did and realize I didn't really love him but, how knows. Well thank you for posting.
| Posted on 2007-05-04 00:00:00 | by RedneckPrincess | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow i realy liked it.. And I loved how no mispelled words....... Well I also loved how at the end every thing ended good and your both happy. and I love how you said you loved her. Most people say when your this young your too young to love but we both know thats wrong..
with all my love,
| Posted on 2006-07-28 00:00:00 | by allmine | [ Reply to This ]
  Well done, my friend. I agree with these fine gentlemen; it appears that you have grown wiser from this experience and you've come to realize both of you are in better places. Nice write.

With love, brother,
| Posted on 2006-07-27 00:00:00 | by Jacob Seibert | [ Reply to This ]
  I agree with coyote, I think. I like the way the poem starts on monday, where there is youthful fascination, and then it goes on until you both have become more mature, and you are finally ready for Tuesday: a new day, a new love perhaps.
| Posted on 2006-07-27 00:00:00 | by girl | [ Reply to This ]
  Very mature reaction. On your part infatuation was more like "fascination", but you handled it well, and lived to write about it. She probably had no clue how you felt (or how deeply) and, if you told her, was likely quite surprised. It seems to have worked out nicely...she's married and you're wiser. Not a bad outcome. Good work, John.
| Posted on 2006-07-27 00:00:00 | by coyote | [ Reply to This ]

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