Holy Shit.. I love this one. I feel it in all its textarity(?).. Damn.. i like how it ends too.. "Why can't we heal".. I'll agree with Allen that at a few parts the feeling gets a little lost, but i don't think its from lack of proper spelling or nothing.. it just moves from you to people? as a whole in some parts.. which i do like tho.. idk.. anyways.. good [censored] poem, and real emotional.. l8ta
I really do like the idea that you are aiming at in this piece, but you've slightly missed the mark to be honest and open. In some aspects of this piece I can see your heart, but in other aspects it seems to be thrown together lacking proper spelling and question marks, but continue working on this I think it is a very good idea.