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    dots Submission Name: Unfinisheddots
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    Author: impassive sky
    ASL Info:    17 / F / CT
    Elite Ratio:    3.65 - 185/190/55
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       Unfinished describes the poems meaning an progess.


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    dotsUnfinisheddots
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    My mind is stagnant
    Winding itself around words
    And letting them slip and bead
    Like sweat

    The words seep back into my fingertips
    And rework themselves,
    Attempting their escape
    From my jungle of a mind

    I pity the ill used words
    Scrambling from my tongue
    Racing towards the keyboard
    They are jagged and broken, unfinished




    Submitted on 2006-07-27 15:15:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like the wording in this, the first stanza being the best (they're all good).

    It does indeed have that "unfinished" feel to it.. but that sort of adds to its charm. Life itself is unfinished.. so why not a poem?

    Enjoyable!

    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2006-07-28 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]


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