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    dots Submission Name: The Bottomdots
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    Author: Ensult
    ASL Info:    19/Male/New York
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 115/114/31
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1154
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 789



    Description:
       This is a poem about poverty.


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    dotsThe Bottomdots
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    People who start rich live off lottery
    While people who start low strive for equality
    Money that makes a man takes his place
    With cake high off the ground and we'll never get a taste
    Blowing their nose with crazy large dollar bills
    Cold from sleeping in a box and being covered with chills
    Using all his money like cologne and you smell his stench
    Sleeping from corner to corner and park bench to park bench
    Every suit is Armani every drink is wine
    Our boxers are newspaper our hats are vine
    Spoiled children and loyal butlers
    Only careers for me are priests and hustlers
    You live great lives and have a glorious death
    For on this side of the plate thats all thats left






    Submitted on 2004-05-17 21:20:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is a good subject to talk about and I like the examples you chose to compare and contrast, but the flow could probably be improved. meh who am i to judge your work though
    | Posted on 2004-05-17 00:00:00 | by spitacidsoot | [ Reply to This ]
      Good rhythm. I especially like the line " only careers for me are priests and hustlers." Don't change a thing.
    | Posted on 2004-05-17 00:00:00 | by Abby Sinthetic | [ Reply to This ]


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