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    dots Submission Name: "Three Dogs and a Women"dots
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    Author: art_is_hard
    ASL Info:    18/f/oh
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 66/79/25
    Words: 216
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       this is the first thing of any substance i've written in and i still feel kinda stuck, but whatever.

    at it's core. it's poem about checking somebody out. is it shallow? i'll let you be the judge of that....go ahead and get your interpreation on if you wish...one more thing. i'm thinking about changing that last stanza. so if you could tell me who you think the speaker is turning their head at in the last stanza that'd be cool.


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    dots"Three Dogs and a Women"dots
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    He walked.
    His clothes were saturated with the muggy, mid-summer rainfall:
    A sponge dressed in casual black slacks and a dark jacket.

    The busy street carried on beside him with tires whizzing and splashing past, leaving misty trails behind them.

    (I sat in the passengerís side
    staring out of the window with the odd sense of content
    that always seems to come to
    me on these rainy days.
    I suppose on these days
    I would call the rain an excuse for
    my usual glum, anti-social abnormalities.

    I was on my way home from an errand.)

    She ran,
    Her attire in compliance with her actions.
    A woman dressed in mid-length shorts and a tight tank.

    The leash attached to her fist lead to the shaggy blonde dog keeping pace in front of her.

    The two sponges crossed soggy paths normally,
    As they did with every other on their respected journeys,
    But this one was significant.
    Presumably it was the scent of wet dog,

    or perhaps it was her tight tank that made him turn his head.

    (Either way
    I smirked and simultaneously shook and turned
    my head shortly after his did the same.)




    Submitted on 2006-07-27 16:33:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      My initial interpretation of this poem seems to coincide with my more thorough second examination. I think that perhaps the infamous "male gaze" is not as exclusive to men as the generalizations would have it. Most of the evidence points to the speaker turning to look at the woman. As a straight male, I cannot readily envision checking out a guy, so that is my instinctual bias. However, other evidence suggests the same. That the speaker describes the man first, taking time to describe him as he/she observes from the passenger window would suggest that the speaker is moving parallel to him and has sufficient time to contemplate him. It's very hard to pass someone going the opposite direction and really notice them much. Additionally, if the speaker was turning to look at the man, the speaker would have no idea that he/she had turned "just after" he had done the same. There's my hard analysis for you.

    And of course I have no reason to assume that the speaker is a female other than that the author is a female, and I know that the speaker is never necessarily the author's own voice. But admittedly, it's much more intriguing to read when one does make that assumption. I don't think of it as an apologia for superficiality, or even shallow really, I just empathize with the fact that it is totally natural, and ridiculously hard not to turn around, tilt your head, and look.
    | Posted on 2006-07-29 00:00:00 | by Aaron Felix | [ Reply to This ]


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