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    dots Submission Name: ABC's of Lifedots

    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 833
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       We're still looking for words that end in -ion for K, X, and Y so if you have any suggestions, your help would be greatly appreciated. THanks.

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    dotsABC's of Lifedots

    Aggression to love
    Beatification of the soul
    Concession of living in the past
    Dissection of the teenage mind
    Erosion of self confidence
    Fragmentation of loving hearts
    Generalization of our lives
    Hallucination of a future relationship
    Illustration of the perfect date
    Justification of our actions
    Literalization of unspoken words
    Mission to achieve our goals
    Notification of the latest crush
    Obsessions about boys
    Progression towards the first kiss
    Quotations from the latest romance novels
    Reconstruction of the broken heart
    Superstitions regarding the next move
    Traditions carried on from year to year
    Underestimation of true feelings
    Vandalization of the human body
    Wanion of lost ones
    Zombification of old memories

    Submitted on 2006-07-27 17:28:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the way that you have used the alphabet as the basis for your poem. It works really well. Have read through it a couple of times and have been trying to think of suggestions for K,X and Y. K maybe could be Keeping up with friends for popularity? I knew that feeling well as a teenager. To be honest it reminds me of when I was a teen myself. The things we had to go through. I particularly like the line 'Beautification of the soul'. It sounds in itself beautiful, and emotional at the same time. It's hard to describe, but that line particularly stood out to me. I'd agree with Kat's idea for Y, as that plays a huge part of being a teen, well it was especially for me because I had very overprotective parents, and felt trapped a lot of the time. I'm not sure what X could stand for really, not much in life can be described with an X! But if you can think of something for that, then it will only make the poem better :) Well done, a great piece you've got here.
    x poetic harmony x
    | Posted on 2006-07-29 00:00:00 | by Poétic Harmonie | [ Reply to This ]
      Knowing ourselves?

    X..I can't think of X...maybe X in the sens of ten? (roman numerals)

    And Y...Yearning for freedom?

    I like this, its amazing that you could come up with so many different sayings with the alphabet. It also contains some interesting facts, along with the common knowledge of being a teen

    | Posted on 2006-07-28 00:00:00 | by MorbidAngel114 | [ Reply to This ]
      Let's try this again! -sighs- The guy sitting next to me unplugged the line of computers and everything turned off half way through my comment.

    A friend of mine directed me to your page and, really, I'm glad she did. You both are good writers. I have read more of your work besides this one and fully plan on commenting on them once I'm done with this comment right now.

    I'm here to talk about your poem, not to kiss ass.

    The particular flow and intrigue of word usage was interesting to say the least. Grammar and flow -wise you are perfectly alright and I cannot find any errors there, but as to your spelling, you do have a few words here and there you need to fix. Though, if you were to read through it one more time they would be easily spotted. Other than that, I can't find anything wrong with it.

    Because I liked this poem so much, I would like to help you filled in the missing letters.

    K- Kinesthetic fortification of the heart
    K- Kinesthetic mutilation of the mind (heart)
    X- Xerographic photographs of (embarassing) childhood (wonderful, comical, anything could work here) memories
    X- Xanadu (a mythological place seeming of great and unmatchable beauty) comparason of beauty
    X- I forgot this third one. If I can think of it again I will be sure to tell you.
    Y- Yearning for justification of death
    Y- Yearning for freedom (going along with Kat's suggestion)
    Y- -dies- Can't remember this one either.

    Well, I hope those help you out. If you need anything else feel free to contact me. Other wise, good work, love, keep it up. You don't see originality like yours on Elite Skills much any more.

    | Posted on 2006-08-28 00:00:00 | by LongPastDead | [ Reply to This ]

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