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    dots Submission Name: Kill the Ones Who Left You Heredots
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    Author: Sarah Leger
    ASL Info:    15.f.kissimmee,Fl
    Elite Ratio:    3.74 - 436/387/80
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 912
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsKill the Ones Who Left You Heredots
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    Kill the ones who left you here
    Broken Bleeding
    Eyes seeping
    Salty liquid down your cheek
    The center of your heart
    Smells so weak
    Burnt again ashes
    Filling up your soul
    Like lead to a pencil
    It will break from the whole
    Different clothes everyday
    Won't change the way
    You look out that window
    Driving down the road
    And you see
    The very person
    You tried so hard to be
    Kill the ones who turned their back on you
    To rot and be forgotten
    When revenge is brought
    Ignorance will be forgotten




    Submitted on 2006-07-27 18:51:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow this one can show alot about anger and wanting to take out revenge on even the stupidest things. you in this write shows a side of hipacracy that you probably dont see. ive been left here broken and bleeding and i graduated got a job and still dont give a [censored] about anything that has happened in the past year to make me want to go back to how it was. just saying you want to kill everyone that has turned there backs on you, just think about who you turned your back on.
    this was a good poem but ou need to try to think of the brighter sides to life and stop looking back, if you look back you wont get ahead in life or excell in anything but deprived repition of dwelling and regret.


    take care please

    eternally
    James
    | Posted on 2006-07-29 00:00:00 | by Ace | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i like this one actually it combines many emotions like despair heartbreak pain......well pains not an emotion but you know what i mean
    | Posted on 2006-07-29 00:00:00 | by MysteriousPoet | [ Reply to This ]


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