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Author: Foreseer
ASL Info:    20/F/In Love
Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 156 /86 /23
Words: 103
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
Total Views: 1210
Average Vote:    4.0000
Bytes: 607


Uhh, well let's see. I was mad when I wrote this, and this is what came to be.


I wish I could go away
and never turn back.
It sounds easy,
but I can't do that yet.

I have to stay here
and watch it all go by.
It's not fair,
I just wanna cry.

I wish again.
What do you want?
I don't know,
that's the problem.

Screw it all,
I want to say.
Can't you see
what's going on?

No you don't.
Oh well I can't
have it all.
And now I guess
wishing will have to do.

Submitted on 2006-07-27 18:54:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i like this good job <3
| Posted on 2006-10-20 00:00:00 | by justkillme08 | [ Reply to This ]
  wow that was pretty good. just kinda remember to do like quotation marks if ur saying something or someone else is. but other wise you did good. and i know the feeling of wanting to just say "screw it" lol but good job!
| Posted on 2006-07-30 00:00:00 | by butterflygirl27 | [ Reply to This ]
  Its good....I know the feeling of wanting to say that to someone infact i almost did but it didnt quit work out that way so yeah...but good job and keep writing!

| Posted on 2006-07-29 00:00:00 | by dark_secrets_ | [ Reply to This ]
  that was a good peice but you need to make it a little more meaningful so you can let the reader know what you are wanting to tell them, plus, you need to work on grammer. Once you get into the rythem of writng and let it just flow, then I will read more of your peices, becuase I can see by just a little work you can make beutiful peices. keep it up

| Posted on 2006-07-27 00:00:00 | by red passion | [ Reply to This ]

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