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    dots Submission Name: Maskdots
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    Author: allmine
    ASL Info:    25/chick/your nightmares
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 33/69/45
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 843
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsMaskdots
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    She hides behind a mask
    pretending to be someone shes not
    She lives a life
    But its not her own
    Shes a character in a movie sayind and doing what everyone else tells her to do
    She waits on cue
    for exactly what to do
    She says what you tell her to say
    She even wears what you tell her to wear
    But when she gets home
    She hides in her room
    Her mask falls apart
    and her eyes fill with tears
    She wants to live like us
    supposly free
    So she waits till the day
    When she can take off the mask
    and revile the wonderful person
    that lies behind the mask




    Submitted on 2006-07-27 18:56:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this sounds like one of my former friends who was totally controled by what ppl thought of her and what her parents told her about EVERYTHING.
    now she is in a mental institution because she was so depressed she'd cut and then TELL HER MOTHER.
    DUMBASS.
    anyway now she's on med. that makes her numb and most annoying to be around...
    everytime i wanna feel sorry for her
    i just remember all the stupid choices she's made and that throws my sympathy right out the window.
    but, anyway, very nice.
    keep it up.
    | Posted on 2007-02-07 00:00:00 | by XmaryjaneX | [ Reply to This ]
      sounds like me. I like it, I act all hyper nice and perverted then I get home and its like whoosh different quite reserved person. I like this a lot your writeing is really good too.
    | Posted on 2007-02-01 00:00:00 | by Ryou_Bakura | [ Reply to This ]
      i feel that you have wonderful idea's and can see your budding talent evolve into a voice that you can really scream with. thie piece reminded me of my earlier work. i sincerly hope that yoiu continue to refine you skills.

    "She waits on cue "

    we chase the final curtain and join the chorus invisible
    | Posted on 2007-01-24 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked it a lot Amanda it was good

    <3 Brandon
    | Posted on 2006-12-05 00:00:00 | by masterzyn | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this. I can see where you're coming from, people always telling you what to do and when to do it. You can't make your own choices until that mask comes off
    I didn't find anything wrong with it, it made me feel true raw emotion like how all poetry and writing should. I would have it rather a character in a play instead of a movie, but that's your choice.

    Keep up the awesome work

    Danni
    | Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by BlueHeart | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very important social issue, people who are idiots will always try to make the innocent try to be the people they are and if they don't live by their standards they will shunn them away from whatever they do, and of course no one likes to be alone all the time. Even though the "mask" analogy has grown chiche it is a very good and effective analogy. this was a ver well written poem.Come check out some of my work I think you will like it:)

    much LOVE
    James
    | Posted on 2006-07-28 00:00:00 | by James Reyna | [ Reply to This ]


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