She hides behind a mask
pretending to be someone shes not
She lives a life
But its not her own
Shes a character in a movie sayind and doing what everyone else tells her to do
She waits on cue
for exactly what to do
She says what you tell her to say
She even wears what you tell her to wear
But when she gets home
She hides in her room
Her mask falls apart
and her eyes fill with tears
She wants to live like us
So she waits till the day
When she can take off the mask
and revile the wonderful person
that lies behind the mask
this sounds like one of my former friends who was totally controled by what ppl thought of her and what her parents told her about EVERYTHING.
now she is in a mental institution because she was so depressed she'd cut and then TELL HER MOTHER.
anyway now she's on med. that makes her numb and most annoying to be around...
everytime i wanna feel sorry for her
i just remember all the stupid choices she's made and that throws my sympathy right out the window.
but, anyway, very nice.
keep it up.
i feel that you have wonderful idea's and can see your budding talent evolve into a voice that you can really scream with. thie piece reminded me of my earlier work. i sincerly hope that yoiu continue to refine you skills.
"She waits on cue "
we chase the final curtain and join the chorus invisible
I really like this. I can see where you're coming from, people always telling you what to do and when to do it. You can't make your own choices until that mask comes off I didn't find anything wrong with it, it made me feel true raw emotion like how all poetry and writing should. I would have it rather a character in a play instead of a movie, but that's your choice.
This is a very important social issue, people who are idiots will always try to make the innocent try to be the people they are and if they don't live by their standards they will shunn them away from whatever they do, and of course no one likes to be alone all the time. Even though the "mask" analogy has grown chiche it is a very good and effective analogy. this was a ver well written poem.Come check out some of my work I think you will like it:)