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All I Ask For

Author: Foreseer
ASL Info:    20/F/In Love
Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 156 /86 /23
Words: 185
Class/Type: Lyrics /Misc
Total Views: 1090
Average Vote:    4.0000
Bytes: 1241


Okay, these are my first lyrics. So I don't know how they came out.

All I Ask For

The truth is not what
it appears to be.
It's hidden
It was you and me
and this mystery.
It's tearin'
us apart.

Why can't you believe in me?
And tell me what's real.
Why can't you trust in me?
It's all I ask for
All I ask for...

I guess this is not true,
evern though we wish so.
It'll never be that way
but we can't give up.
We have to stay together,
just you and me.

Why can't you believe in me?
And tell me what's real.
Why can't you trust in me?
It's all I ask for.
All I ask for...yeah.

It's all I ask for.
Is that you trust me.
Is that you believe in me.
Is it so much to ask for?

I can't wait any longer,
my heart is breaking.
The pain I feel,
you seem blind to.
I'm fading slowly,
whatever's left of me.
I leave in your hands.

But I think I'll
Trust you, forever...forever.

Submitted on 2006-07-27 19:00:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  It's angry, I like it. I know a lot of people and relate, since I bet everyone has wanted trust from someone who doesn't have it. I like the little detail at the end that remarks acceptence. Really good. (And thanks for liking my piece!)
| Posted on 2006-08-02 00:00:00 | by Castalia | [ Reply to This ]
  This is good...and i can relate im havind those issues so yeah really good job

| Posted on 2006-07-29 00:00:00 | by dark_secrets_ | [ Reply to This ]
  i really liked this. if you make it into a song i'ma buy your single! i can relate with the whole trust part of it. keep writing...
</3 lisa
| Posted on 2006-07-27 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]

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