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    dots Submission Name: All I Ask Fordots
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    Author: Foreseer
    ASL Info:    20/F/In Love
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 156/86/23
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 971
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1241



    Description:
       Okay, these are my first lyrics. So I don't know how they came out.


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    dotsAll I Ask Fordots
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    The truth is not what
    it appears to be.
    It's hidden
    everywhere.
    It was you and me
    and this mystery.
    It's tearin'
    us apart.

    [Chorus:]
    Why can't you believe in me?
    And tell me what's real.
    Why can't you trust in me?
    It's all I ask for
    All I ask for...

    I guess this is not true,
    evern though we wish so.
    It'll never be that way
    but we can't give up.
    We have to stay together,
    just you and me.
    But...

    [Chorus:]
    Why can't you believe in me?
    And tell me what's real.
    Why can't you trust in me?
    It's all I ask for.
    All I ask for...yeah.

    It's all I ask for.
    Is that you trust me.
    Is that you believe in me.
    Is it so much to ask for?

    I can't wait any longer,
    my heart is breaking.
    The pain I feel,
    you seem blind to.
    I'm fading slowly,
    whatever's left of me.
    I leave in your hands.

    But I think I'll
    Trust you, forever...forever.




    Submitted on 2006-07-27 19:00:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It's angry, I like it. I know a lot of people and relate, since I bet everyone has wanted trust from someone who doesn't have it. I like the little detail at the end that remarks acceptence. Really good. (And thanks for liking my piece!)
    | Posted on 2006-08-02 00:00:00 | by Castalia | [ Reply to This ]
      This is good...and i can relate im havind those issues so yeah really good job

    Brittany
    | Posted on 2006-07-29 00:00:00 | by dark_secrets_ | [ Reply to This ]
      i really liked this. if you make it into a song i'ma buy your single! i can relate with the whole trust part of it. keep writing...
    </3 lisa
    | Posted on 2006-07-27 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]


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