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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots

    Author: Sarah Leger
    ASL Info:    15.f.kissimmee,Fl
    Elite Ratio:    3.74 - 436/387/80
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    The mark of a year
    Since everything came and went
    Warped around so fast
    I barely cought my breath
    Held on too tight
    to the ones I had to let go
    And now I hear things
    About some from 'long ago'
    Missing the world
    I pushed my way through
    Missing the one by my side
    Yeah, that means I'm missing you.

    Push your head under water
    See the visions from before
    Suffocation under the pillow
    Brings a rest one is so worthy of
    The pill bottle remains empty
    I'm hiding from my knife
    So many times I've blocked that door shut
    Hoping to end my life
    Its far too gone
    To bring back whole
    So just sit on the couch
    Refilling the cereal bowl
    Saturday morning cartoons
    Flash before your eyes
    If you sit there long enough
    You'll forget all the cries

    Submitted on 2006-07-27 19:00:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really liked this. The main idea of the poem sort of jumped around, but it was still really good. It was descriptive and really made me feel what you were feeling. Good job!
    | Posted on 2006-07-28 00:00:00 | by mysterious one | [ Reply to This ]

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