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    dots Submission Name: Even In Deathdots

    Author: LadyChaos
    ASL Info:    19/F/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 718/606/95
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       I wrote this 4 yrs ago.

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    dotsEven In Deathdots

    Your love is like a crimson rose, but
    Roses have thorns, and
    Thorns draw blood.
    I have never stopped bleeding.

    Even now,
    though you've been gone for what's left of eternity
    My heart still bleeds, and I don't think that
    It will ever stop, even in death.

    Your love is like quiet flame,
    But fire is hot,
    And heat brings pain.
    I have never stopped burning.

    Even now,
    Though you've been gone longer than I can be sure,
    My heart still burns, and I know that
    It will never stop, even in death

    Your love is like a stalwart tree,
    But trees have weak limbs,
    And weak limbs break.
    I have never stopped falling.

    Even now,
    Though you've been gone forever and a day,
    My heart still falls, and I know that
    It will never stop, even in death.

    Submitted on 2006-07-27 20:27:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Damn thas pretty good man - its a truism that love never really goes away. I like that phrase, someone gone for wot's left of eternity. Thas pretty damn hot. Altho like i sed, its a truism in my opinion. People feel the emotions their hearts make them, but keep the emotions that they choose to. Only you can prevent heart fires. Also get it right - all trees don't have weak limbs; WEAK TREES have weak limbs. After four years, I hope u've figured such things out. An excellent write, and i wouldnt say this save that i kno u in reality - u r one maudlin little hotsauce lover - cheer up!
    | Posted on 2006-08-08 00:00:00 | by particularshard | [ Reply to This ]
      this was really good. i have to agree with DrangonflyKisses. you really put it in a way that can be understanding. and right now im in a love that will never stop, like your poem, even in death. but it's a good love, not the kind of love that can bring you pain.
    | Posted on 2006-07-28 00:00:00 | by lover_gurl | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW!! I'm in awwe! I loved it! It's really relatable...well at least for me cuz it's something I'm kind of going through right now. It actually speaks to me so well I want to cry!
    Thanks for the AMAZING write!! It touched my heart completly!!
    | Posted on 2006-07-28 00:00:00 | by DragonflyKisses | [ Reply to This ]

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