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    dots Submission Name: Broken Cameldots
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    Author: EseanB
    ASL Info:    30/M/TN
    Elite Ratio:    2.38 - 99/138/84
    Words: 201
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 600
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1195



    Description:
       I wrote this for my "X"-wife. She is still suffering post-traumatic stress from her childhood with nightmares and flashbacks still effin her up, but also she is also bi-polar.


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    dotsBroken Cameldots
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    In my journals I have written,
    About the tears I have cried,
    The pain I endured from your love.

    I was born prematurely,
    Maybe I should have died,
    Since dead is the way you made me feel.

    So abused from your love,
    I felt so hated in your care,
    So used as you took advantage of me.

    Beaten, broken, and molested,
    I cried from pain and fear,
    Even from these words that I hear; I love you.

    How can you love me with the pain you inflict,
    Can you not see the terror you bring upon me,
    This blade was meant for you instead of me.

    I lived my life by a thread,
    Not knowing real love,
    Wishing the hurt and hate would disappear.

    Then I met him,
    A man who, in some ways, changed my life,
    Giving me a reason to move forward.

    Two beautiful girls were born of this marriage,
    They are my hope and love,
    I will not ever do to them what you did to me.

    My marriage may have failed,
    My love for my kids will not,
    My life will continue with all my courage and strength.




    Submitted on 2006-07-28 05:26:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      ooh. I dont like that last comment. Damn, needs some depth to it, I dont see how they got away with it, usually it will tell you to write more. Anyways. ON with my comment :D I LOVED IT! I related to it, as I do most of your works. It was awesome. Do you write any rhymes though? I would love to read some like that, since they are my favorite, but this one was still good none the less:) By the way, IM STALKING YOU AS OF NOW! :P

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    | Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by drk_angl_17 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it
    | Posted on 2006-07-29 00:00:00 | by Gothic Misery | [ Reply to This ]


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