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What Did I Do?


Author: od9.1.04
ASL Info:    15/f/oh
Elite Ratio:    1.68 - 18 /38 /19
Words: 108
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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What Did I Do?



They said it wasn’t my fault.
They said it so many times.
Dad said he would never hit mom.
But then he makes her cry.

They said they would never leave me.
And said they loved me so.
But why is this house empty?
Where did they both go?

My life is now a broken dream.
Where I live is a broken home.
At the top of my lungs I made a scream.
I still felt all alone.

Why did they leave me in this house?
And leave the broken pieces?
My voice torn to a shattered shout.
Their love was all I needed.




Submitted on 2006-07-28 12:26:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i can feel the resentment in this poem, the sense of lonliness and th fear of not knowing whats going to happen. Nice piece.

Brian
| Posted on 2006-07-28 00:00:00 | by b_v_grant | [ Reply to This ]
  this is such a sad poem. it made me feel like i was the one who was wondering what happened. this was a really good job. Joanna
| Posted on 2006-07-28 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]
  I felt complete sadness in reading this. It is so open and vulnerable. I hope you find strength in love for yourself. Remember that when our worldly parents cannot love us like we were meant to be loved, our Heavenly Father is always there. You are a child of God and you are LOVED. :)

Keep your head up!
| Posted on 2006-07-28 00:00:00 | by maiya | [ Reply to This ]
  i love it... athough it does seem like your parents were there... but at the same time they werent, you know what i mean? i could be wrong. b-e-a-u-ti- FUL chicka
| Posted on 2006-08-02 00:00:00 | by sravenlyn | [ Reply to This ]


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