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Scarlett Blossoms

Author: lynn marsters
ASL Info:    20/f/canada
Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 49 /61 /32
Words: 35
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Scarlett Blossoms

Metallic flavor
Scarlett blossoms


Slowly drips
onto his lips

Oh! the beauty,
he did exclaim,
Oh! the beauty
of the pain

Submitted on 2006-07-28 14:09:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  oh my. sadism, blood, possible vampiric influence, all in such a short work? I wold love to know what promted this to come to mind. The form is sparse, yet conveys the concept nicely. One question: if blod is so full of iron, why does it taste like copper?

Ignis Fatuus
| Posted on 2007-08-16 00:00:00 | by Ignis Fatuus | [ Reply to This ]
  i've never read a poem like this before and i think it is fantastic... i added it to my favourite...

"Oh! the beauty
of the pain"

the last line and its so captivating.. i love it

| Posted on 2007-08-15 00:00:00 | by MysterydarkPoet | [ Reply to This ]
  wonderful... provocative. just the right amount of simplicity. thsi piece envokes many images all a relentless passion and desire
| Posted on 2006-07-28 00:00:00 | by blackhart | [ Reply to This ]
  i like this a lot. it sounds a little sadistic but its good. hey, aren't we all sadists sometimes??? oh well. very good work. keep posting. i would love to read more by you soon. you are an awesome writer.
love tina
| Posted on 2006-07-28 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]

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