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    dots Submission Name: Look Past it Alldots
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    Author: GothamFreak
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 110/48/19
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
    Total Views: 744
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       After all this time there is still discrimination in the U.S. against middle easterners/muslims...

    The discrimination has to stop.


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    dotsLook Past it Alldots
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    look past
    the skin color
    and the different
    ways of life
    look past
    what the others did
    not everybody
    is the same

    you say
    you understand
    and you say
    "all man are created equal"
    but the way
    that you treat them
    is not the same

    you deny the discrimination
    that is so obviously there
    just because
    your companions are oblivious
    does not mean
    that I didn't notice
    because surely
    there are people that care

    so look past
    the skin color
    and the different
    ways of life
    look past
    what the others did
    not everybody
    is the same
    look past it all




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      The term is human race or should I say human racist. Perhapes humankind ahh I don't think so. Where did the term inhuman come from anyhow.

    A lot of questionable statements to go along with the previous, at best I would say matches up to grevious.

    Since being a human and not being part of the things humans have crafted for war or to kill specifically for human. I can say the lines above and with my shoulders shrug. Some may say (do you not feel our pain) well of course I do) I also feel there pain as well.

    If anyone is into Yodi he would say pain leads to sufferin, sufferin leads to anger, anger leads to something about the dark side. Odd isn't it.

    Look how Hitler tortured and killed millions what a monster. Still the united states and its glory power what ever Kills. If there is a lighter side of killing then I soppose the slow killing of its own home with the mass pollution dumbed into the water supply. Or the selling/buying of a carburator that gets a 100 miles to a gallong. Currently not in use, That way we can take from the earth it's precious oil and leave big empty holes in the earth. So when we get an earth quake we no longer have a good shock absorber except human flesh. Hmm some light side.

    The Darker side gees, why even bother a waste of time. Think about it if the united states could care so little about it's own. Then look what it takes from others. Here it rapes the earth and leaves holes. Over there it just leaves holes every where. There is a fine line between justice and Revenge. BOOM BOOM all day, the soldiers become numb for the rest of there life changed cause of the children they destroyed. I have a shell of a friend now. At least he is physically whole. What about the rest It is the test of driving the madness truck how far will it go and on what fuel. More so what is the cost of that fuel.

    Sry kinda just went off a bit. This Poem brings issues to life with real imagery. Also touches on some very strong stubjects. Hope you will be able to resolve this turmoil within your self. I also liked the Title Look Pass It All. I think it fits into this piece well. Ok over all good job keep it up



    Sincerley Gannondalf aka Big Bear

    | Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by Gannondalf | [ Reply to This ]
      Very true...this poem even started out with the truth. It was raw, which is a good thing, but if you don't understand let me explain. I say it's raw because so many other people know this truth. but they cake it on with lies, and anger, that simply drives them to more hate. You were brutally honest, in a way, and open, you didn't hold it back, it was flat out and ready to be judged by those who viewed it.
    In the first stanza, when you said 'look past what the others did, not everybody is the same', I was also reminded of Columbine. It spread alot of fear into "gothic" culture for some reason, donning violent lyrics as the scapegoat for some reason. And ever since then, anyone who listens to songs with these, 'violent' lyrics is judged and pushed away in fear that they themselves might snap. It's not right, just as it's not right to judge anyone by anything that is them, skin color, clothes, music, interests, and even sexuality. To me any kind of judgement is prejudice, and prejudice is wrong.
    Very mind opening write and job well done.

    *tox*
    | Posted on 2006-07-29 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      dude good job mannn. me like de end.
    | Posted on 2006-08-20 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      Very true. I, being a Pakistani Muslim, understood what you were saying. Recently, some family members went to London [after the bombings]. They always got served last and occasionally, people would throw stuff at them and start screaming "paki paki". Unfortunately, things like this even exist in the so-called "superior" crowd in this world.

    I am glad that you took the time to write and create some awareness about a topic that needs to be noted.

    I don't think it is fair to any one to be classified by colour/religon/anything.

    I remember whenever I travel, at the sight of my green Pakistani passport, the customs hold me up, once for an hour.

    I could really relate to this. You carried it out simply and directly, yet well. This was powerful. Well done.



    Abbas
    | Posted on 2006-08-23 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]


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