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    dots Submission Name: Togetherdots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Lyrics/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 520
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1180



    Description:
       i wrote this song for a guy named chris. i've talked about him a lot on this site. i really love him. i hope he remembers me. i kmnow that me and him will never be together and this piecr is jusst a way of admitting it to myself.


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    dotsTogetherdots
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    I'm sitting here
    Looking out the window
    With you here
    On my mind
    I'm looking down
    At the empty pillow
    Knowing I
    Will never find out



    if we could be
    together
    just you and me
    together
    we'll never be
    together
    forever
    together


    I'm waiting for
    You to sit beside me
    Thinking how
    We'll never be
    I'm longing for
    Your warm embrace
    My mind is blank
    Yet wandering


    if we could be
    together
    just you and me
    together
    we'll never be
    together
    forever
    together


    I write these words
    For you to read
    I sing this song
    For you to hear
    I'll stand by you
    If you will let me
    I'd wipe your eyes
    I'd ease your fears


    if we could be
    together
    just you and me
    together
    we'll never be
    together
    forever
    together


    *end*




    Submitted on 2006-07-28 16:26:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The flow of your poetry is very cool, I enjoyed the repetition, where it could have gotten old it just flowed beautifully with the story you were telling, the repeating stanza makes me think of this like song lyrics, I think it could potentially translate well into that arena, keep up the good work
    | Posted on 2006-07-28 00:00:00 | by lynn marsters | [ Reply to This ]


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