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Moon Faerie

Author: Aetha Daemon
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Words: 116
Class/Type: Poetry /Childrens
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I love the rythem of this one!

Moon Faerie

Asleep upon a cloudlet
She will not wake 'til dark
Though if a wind can nudge her off
She'll wake up with a start

'Round and 'round the world she goes
She dances with such grace
As she flings her stars up high
She pinpoints every place

Jamaica where the moon is clear
No fog or muck in sight
Chicago where pollution reeks
And Nepal's snowy heights

She cannot stop or else somewhere
Her star patterns will break
Confusion mounting everywhere
Her very job at stake

So when her nighttime work is done
She'll find her cloudlet ray
And sleep a slumber oh so deep
She'll sleep right through the day

Submitted on 2006-07-28 16:56:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I loved this personification of the moon, or rather, the night itself as a fairy. Beautiful, descriptive, elegant, and eloquent. I loved the ryhme and flow of it. I loved the various allusions present here as well. Star patterns. Lovely. The descriptives of night in different places, clear in one, mucked in another. Lovely job.
| Posted on 2008-03-22 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]
  This reminded me of some kind of old-age child's tale...I know it's under 'children's' poetry, but it just reminded me of fairy-tale stories I used to read when I was younger, or of the old myths of how the gods placed the stars in the sky and how they did it. It brought to mind many things, but I can't find a way to put them into words.

| Posted on 2006-07-29 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a really cute poem. I couldnt help but think of tinkerbell as I read this poem. Not that it was similar to Peter Pan but probably because she is the only fairy I am aware of haha! This is a wonderful childrens poem. Perfect for them to read as it is simple yet tells a cute little story too. I like the title too. I love the moon and a nighttime fairy is a cool thought. I picture her all illuminated as she flies about. Very creative and fun write. Nice work here.

| Posted on 2006-07-29 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
  Hmm..I liked this one, I don't really know why, but I do. I had to read it twice since the first time it was just to get the feel of it; I understand that the Moon Faerie basically paints the night sky. Since you just want thoughts, I was thinking of a calm, clear night with a moon almost full as slowly, the stars started shining. That would be a pleasant time to go for a moonlit walk with a close friend or someone you love. Imagine how perfect that night would be
It actually reminded me of what I was for Halloween (yes, I know..I still love to dress up for it) I was a Midnight Faerie (or what my friends called a Gothic Faerie). I don't really know what that type of faerie would do, but I'm figuring it's not like the type you wrote about.
I don't know what else to say about this, especially since I enjoyed reading such a "fun" poem (at least I think it is).

Actually, the 4th stanza seems somewhat messy (if I could say)
"Confusion mounting everywhere
Her very job at stake"
Those lines seemed to mess up the rhythm and calmness of the whole poem. Everything else was written at a [peaceful] manner, and then these lines interrupt. (Sorry, I can't really say how you should change it, but I'm just pointing it out)

Nonetheless, I loved it
| Posted on 2006-07-28 00:00:00 | by Ebony Medvick | [ Reply to This ]

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