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    dots Submission Name: Wasteland of Timedots
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    Author: coyote
    ASL Info:    57/Male/Nevada
    Elite Ratio:    4.57 - 71/56/28
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
       Just thoughts from long ago and far away.


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    dotsWasteland of Timedots
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    Minute thoughts recorded on the tablets of time
    thinking love graces music in a world out of rhyme.
    In a system perfected to envelope all wrong
    when cast in the wasteland of beauty and song.
    I wander and wonder of happening love,
    and where I can grab the brass ring and pull myself up above--
    for love must be grasped by these hands of mine
    or I drift back to the wasteland and follow the blind.


    Tan Son Nhut 18 Dec 1970




    Submitted on 2006-07-29 08:08:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think this poem conveys what it's like to live without love, yet long for it...you feel as if you need love, otherwise, you will sink back into this darkness and lose yourself to the feelings it can bring. This was pretty good, I liked how you ended it with the date, instead of putting it in your description, for me it added more personality to it.
    The title is basically self explanitory. since this happened some while ago, and you felt this way, it only makes sense to call it a wastseland of time...it worked well, nicely done.

    *tox*
    | Posted on 2006-07-29 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      Coyote,

    For love must be grasped by these hands of mine
    or I drift back to the wasteland and follow the blind.



    Great lines. I wonder if you feel the some 35 years later. Did you ever get the ring?

    Nice work

    Chrystine
    | Posted on 2006-07-30 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]


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