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    dots Submission Name: Jaguar Smiledots
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    Author: Localfreak
    ASL Info:    37, Maybe, Here
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 131/123/76
    Words: 258
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 1433
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1521



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       Just an old song written the first time I ever got stoned...

    last too strangly enough


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    dotsJaguar Smiledots
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    Save your prayers for the mother of sickness
    Hide your face as to hide all your weaknesses

    Save a tear for the path of the liars
    Cut the truth from the honorable silence

    Try to destroy the sign of the holy crux
    Giving up on the Christian lost cause
    Do you want to burn the cross of thorns
    Or take it home, make it ever yours?

    Speak a lie to the Angel of Darkness
    Bow your head as your soul withers away

    Hide the Jaguars head inside your smile
    The bloodied tracks lead to where your conscious died

    Pray to gurus, pray to Peters cross
    Believe you’re found, do you know what’s lost
    You speak my name, d’you know who I am
    I am god, I am devil, I am man

    Hear a scream from the iron maiden
    Was it your hand pushed the coffin shut?

    Exorcised for your dreamless walking
    Or are the answers within the sleep talking

    Digging six feet down I see your face
    This burial ground, your resting place
    Tried to sip from the unholy grail
    You signed the scroll and now your soul’s for sale

    Whoever led you down my garden path?
    Scream a little louder it makes me laugh
    Say your final prayer to the forgotten lord
    For one last look around before I close the door

    You’re not getting out. You’re forever mine
    Speak my name again. Jaguar smile!




    Submitted on 2006-07-29 08:47:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Ah, the adoration of the hunters; serve you kings, not your lord. Did you know you can be killed for the truth, and that truth is perception? So be careful how you perceive the world, language, loss, hatred, love…

    I wonder, but I believe you would find ‘Beyond the Sacred Page’ a most provoking book, it addresses many a topic you … “just happen” to mention. Religion is curious, and how it links in with law even more interesting, because…it hardly does. Law cannot capture God, imprison him. Truth lives, and lives beyond what has been died for.

    On you writing, I like it. I didn’t fully agree, and honestly, it even scared me a little. On presentation, make the s in smile capital. Interesting read.

    Don’t be a junkie,

    Mandolin
    | Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by Mandolin | [ Reply to This ]


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