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    dots Submission Name: The Winds Of Timedots
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    Author: bbcherry
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    dotsThe Winds Of Timedots
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    The Winds Of Time
    By Jennifer Hobson
    I am but a leaf riding on the winds of time, slowly I move as the winds begin to blow, my body twisting and turning as I ride the wind currents along lifes way. As the winds slowly cease to blow, I fall softly to the earth only to lay for awhile and rest for a spell, for I know the winds will blow again and my body will take flight. I will rise above the troubled earth as I move along lives path, I will soar high above again and look down on my past. As I venture into the future winds of time I will not be afraid for I have been there before and I know what life has in store.
    Oh how many times have the winds been here before, I feel that their presence have touched, oh so many, yet so few will gain from their guiding path. Their currents stream across our land
    cleansing our souls. Oh but a leaf I am blowing on the winds of time




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      Good flow (I hate saying that, it's so generic and overused but I don't know how else to say it), it's easy to read, right down to the end. I'm curious about the winds, they must not only represent time, but something that moves and rests, something more of a 'being' than time itself. I like the reminiscent aspect, it's very soothing. This piece reminds me of a way I feel sometimes when I've found an answer to something, something that leaves me content and calm again. I might consider rewording/punctuating the last sentence, it would leave a clearer ending. I like this a lot, reminds me of good times...and a lot of things, actually.
    | Posted on 2006-08-02 00:00:00 | by Kunoichi | [ Reply to This ]


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