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Nature Is . . . .


Author: James Reyna
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Nature Is . . . .



Nature is . . . . sunlight,
That starts off another day
And life seems so bright
For bad memories fade away

Nature is . . . . flowers
That the husband will pick for his wife
And though to grow, we must have showers
It shows that everyday produces life

Nature is . . . . love
That produces in the heart
That when freed like a dove
Creates a bond that can never fall apart

Nature is . . . . rain
That drops in the afternoon
That reminds us of our deepest pain
And makes us long for June

Nature is . . . . Sleep
A picture of death
And though some wake up, feeling defeat
Some lie down, breathing their final breath.




Submitted on 2006-07-29 20:45:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  James, this is very good! You have a developing talent, and have the courage to write about love, nature, and kindness which shows maturity and genius! I notice you have a guitar in your photo, and many of your poems show a rythmn and a story that reads like a song; leads me to believe than songwriting is among your talents! Keep up the good work!
| Posted on 2006-10-26 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
  wow! i really enjoyed this one. i could almost hear it in my head being recited....wait i COULD hear it in my head and it's still lingering. i loved it. it was so peaceful and just relaxing. i might have to come back and read it when i'm stressed. lol. bye love.

luv,
shay
| Posted on 2006-08-13 00:00:00 | by shayla8911 | [ Reply to This ]
  This is beautiful. I just love nature.

I also love the flow of the poem. It was easy to read and understand. I think my favorite part was the forth stanza. How you said that the rain reminds us of our deepest pain is so true. I can relate most to that part.

The last stanza was good too. I liked how you put the last line down, and although it was a sad line, it is after all nature. We all live, and then we all die. It's a part of life.

Piper



| Posted on 2006-08-04 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]
  I have to say James, I do believe you are a ---natural--- for poem writing.
I enjoy poems that rhyme and yours is going to be a pleasure to read.
Looking forward to reading more of your writes!

Smiles and laughter
~Linda
| Posted on 2006-08-01 00:00:00 | by AlabamaFarmGirl | [ Reply to This ]
  Very eloquent way of putting it James. I can tell you put a lot into this and see you are maturing in your writing...thats always cool to see.


That just makes me smile to see a persons evlolution in their thoughts and writing. You are learning quick.

I read this one stanza this way though:

Nature is . . . . love
Produced in gold hearts
That are freed like a dove
Creating bonds that weld all the parts

But then again, I have been known to read too much into things, HA! And that...is just how I read that stanza.

Cool beans maynard!
| Posted on 2006-07-29 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
  Besides the 1st and 4th verses, I loved this. And those also because of personal views on sunshine and rain. You avoided unoriginality and described brilliantly and managed to put in rhymes. I have no nitpicking for this write. I love nature, and I love this. Well done


Abbas
| Posted on 2006-08-24 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
  Hi James this is a very well written piece and your words flow so eay I like the style the emotions so eloquently expressed your writing has improved a great deal I really enjolyed this one alot so keep up this beautiful writing James looking forward to reading more of your work in the future.

Wilma
| Posted on 2006-08-23 00:00:00 | by LadyMustang | [ Reply to This ]
  this had a nice beat and flow to it,, very "natural" and no feelings of force in the words...nice when read aloud as well....liked also that this reminded me of life as a natual circle, beginning as a birth, life and love, and ending in death...take care
Michelle Fey
| Posted on 2006-08-20 00:00:00 | by Fey | [ Reply to This ]


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