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    dots Submission Name: SECOND FACEdots
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    Author: imagination
    ASL Info:    18/male/India
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 165/50/23
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 203
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    dotsSECOND FACEdots
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    We look at mirror
    Appreciate reflection
    And forget
    A face of class was painted black

    We look from lens
    See near and far sights
    And forget
    Glass was nailed

    We look at bottles
    Drink our wishes
    And forget
    Glass was tortured till it melts

    We look at T.V
    View worldly things
    And forget
    Glass was confined in box

    We look at ugly
    Curse it
    And forget
    We appreciate beauty because there is ugliness




    Submitted on 2006-07-29 21:29:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "We look at ugly
    Curse it
    And forget
    We appreciate beauty because there is ugliness"

    yo that is cool. the perspective u look at it.


    Grim


    | Posted on 2006-08-16 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      okay, i like this poem. the glass/forgetting theme is really nice, and i like how it's carried throughout the piece. the tone is fitting, too.

    uhm, criticism. maybe you could change "See near and far sights" to make it flow better? and make the last line a little shorter, maybe. hah, the only complaints i really have are nitpicking details.

    i really like it; it's probably one of the best i've read on here so far (even though i'm new).
    | Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by explosions | [ Reply to This ]



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