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    dots Submission Name: words of the unconsciencedots
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    Author: shootingstar
    ASL Info:    22/f/hell
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 102/120/21
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angst
    Total Views: 608
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       umm...yeah, take this as you will. it deserves a disclaimer so...warning: this is full of self hatered.


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    dotswords of the unconsciencedots
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    Lie to yourself again little girl
    Tell them what they want to hear
    Keep them away from your cold inner world.
    Let no one see your tears

    Weakened again by your heart, hopeful one,
    Your lonliness blinded the real.
    I've told you before, you can trust no one.
    Why would they care that you feel?

    Keep your distance, poison child,
    Save the world from your fire.
    You are not of them, too toxic and wild,
    Though these humans can quench your desire.

    Naive little wench, stop your crying.
    I deny every thought in your head.
    Those words of "I love you", are lying,
    And mocking the places you've bled.

    So hold your head high, fake a smile.
    It can't be as dark as it seems.
    Retreat to your thoughts for a while,
    And slaughter them all in your dreams.




    Submitted on 2004-05-18 07:47:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Im confused. I guess this is above my level of understading, you know, since you are that good. You do have a few ponctuation mistakes but eh...this IS poetry hehehehe. Good write I sort of know what you're talking about.

    -Bruno
    | Posted on 2004-06-25 00:00:00 | by brunov68 | [ Reply to This ]
      *bows bows bows.... this is a very nice piece! gota take some pointers off you that is if you'd allow me to.... so graciously. very interesting
    | Posted on 2004-05-24 00:00:00 | by BloodChildVagueSoul | [ Reply to This ]
      Dark, brooding, morbid. You were right about your disclaimer it is full of self hatred, however much against my desire, i will refrain from giving advice or telling you to get saved. however i think it is good for people to express themselves then let this stuff consume them from the inside like a cancer. Write on.
    | Posted on 2004-05-18 00:00:00 | by Watchman | [ Reply to This ]



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