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    dots Submission Name: now, not foreverdots

    Author: katie-bear13
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    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsnow, not foreverdots

    take away what they said
    force my mind to believe
    what is now dead
    before i ruined everything
    and sat alone with nothing
    except my guilt and regret
    now the pieces dont fit
    those lies killed a relationship
    but my choice made it rip
    trying to find the pieces
    and erasing all the repeats
    of mistakes we made
    and saying words of hate
    i hope it was just out of anger
    that we arent really in danger
    of being lonly forever
    just for the summer
    til we get back together
    to share so much more
    healing up this enlarged sore
    and paon we wont know anymore

    Submitted on 2006-07-29 23:16:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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