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who's gonna cry out (new orleasns version)


Author: unknown soldier
ASL Info:    17/kenner, La (N.O)
Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 1348 /1346 /203
Words: 178
Class/Type: Lyrics /Serious
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i was inspired by a submission by xtremegentleman


who's gonna cry out (new orleasns version)



Gas stations and fast food restaurants are constantly hiring
Gang bangers firing
Bullets flying, drowning out the song of the sirens
Surrounded by violence
Can’t wash the blood off our hands without hydrants
Political tyrants try to keep us living in silence
Until they get opposed by those we consider lyrical giants
Drug dealers keep selling to their egotistical clients
So kids get raised to continue the chain
Of the deadliest game where we overdose on cocaine
The horror remains as we get slain
Preordained that we’ll fall into the ignorance that we feign
Prostitutes making money on the corners giving brain
Being betrayed by those whose loyalty we claim
How do we come from being nobody to getting sixty seconds of fame?
How can we make a change when everything is the same?
Who’s gonna cry out, lead us to a new age?
The Katrina Chapter isn’t over but Bush is turning the page
The Gulf Coast needs more aid so that we can recover
Nobody cries out as we continue life in this gutter




Submitted on 2006-07-29 23:34:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i was just reading Kay's favorites and this is one of them. I am so glad that i decided to read them. I agree with everything you say. It is going to take generations and generations to solve the cycle of drugs/guns/gangs/violence. all i can say is that i will keep hoping and praying that one day we can all love/help/ and save each other instead of hate/use/ and kill each other. great write :-D

| Posted on 2006-09-26 00:00:00 | by OrangeWithWhite | [ Reply to This ]
  i love this. and its so true, i was in new orleans last year n u jus described it perfectly.
well looks like ill b adding this one to my favs too. i jus love your work<3ash
| Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
  I love this. I love the first four lines. Very well done. I always finish your writings wishing there was more to read.

AL
| Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
  hi bubz i luved this, good flow n' you have got style for writting,
keep em cummin
kyrenia x
| Posted on 2006-07-30 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
  damn i love the way you use words. all is true and

"The Katrina Chapter isn’t over but Bush is turning the page"

that really hit me... i don't even know what to say...

i haven't been on Elite in a while, and i came back excepting to find something great to read..

and i found this which is better than 'great'
its a fav
| Posted on 2006-07-30 00:00:00 | by Kay | [ Reply to This ]
  Great work candyman! I feel again, you spoke truth and spoke it well. I think your venting is making you be far more creative then usaul. your stuff is off the hizzy. This was blunt and said hey, things are not right in N.O. and help is still needed.

Catrina
| Posted on 2006-09-08 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
  yo this was deep for real, and i'm adding it to my favs. lol by the way did you miss me?? haha. i missed me anyways this was good for real my favorite line was:
Prostitutes making money on the corners giving brain
Being betrayed by those whose loyalty we claim
anyways keep 'em cumming.

| Posted on 2006-08-03 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]


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