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    dots Submission Name: who's gonna cry out (new orleasns version)dots
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    Author: unknown soldier
    ASL Info:    17/kenner, La (N.O)
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 1348/1346/203
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 1045
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1124



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       i was inspired by a submission by xtremegentleman


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    dotswho's gonna cry out (new orleasns version)dots
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    Gas stations and fast food restaurants are constantly hiring
    Gang bangers firing
    Bullets flying, drowning out the song of the sirens
    Surrounded by violence
    Canít wash the blood off our hands without hydrants
    Political tyrants try to keep us living in silence
    Until they get opposed by those we consider lyrical giants
    Drug dealers keep selling to their egotistical clients
    So kids get raised to continue the chain
    Of the deadliest game where we overdose on cocaine
    The horror remains as we get slain
    Preordained that weíll fall into the ignorance that we feign
    Prostitutes making money on the corners giving brain
    Being betrayed by those whose loyalty we claim
    How do we come from being nobody to getting sixty seconds of fame?
    How can we make a change when everything is the same?
    Whoís gonna cry out, lead us to a new age?
    The Katrina Chapter isnít over but Bush is turning the page
    The Gulf Coast needs more aid so that we can recover
    Nobody cries out as we continue life in this gutter




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      i was just reading Kay's favorites and this is one of them. I am so glad that i decided to read them. I agree with everything you say. It is going to take generations and generations to solve the cycle of drugs/guns/gangs/violence. all i can say is that i will keep hoping and praying that one day we can all love/help/ and save each other instead of hate/use/ and kill each other. great write :-D

    | Posted on 2006-09-26 00:00:00 | by OrangeWithWhite | [ Reply to This ]
      i love this. and its so true, i was in new orleans last year n u jus described it perfectly.
    well looks like ill b adding this one to my favs too. i jus love your work<3ash
    | Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this. I love the first four lines. Very well done. I always finish your writings wishing there was more to read.

    AL
    | Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      hi bubz i luved this, good flow n' you have got style for writting,
    keep em cummin
    kyrenia x
    | Posted on 2006-07-30 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
      damn i love the way you use words. all is true and

    "The Katrina Chapter isnít over but Bush is turning the page"

    that really hit me... i don't even know what to say...

    i haven't been on Elite in a while, and i came back excepting to find something great to read..

    and i found this which is better than 'great'
    its a fav
    | Posted on 2006-07-30 00:00:00 | by Kay | [ Reply to This ]
      Great work candyman! I feel again, you spoke truth and spoke it well. I think your venting is making you be far more creative then usaul. your stuff is off the hizzy. This was blunt and said hey, things are not right in N.O. and help is still needed.

    Catrina
    | Posted on 2006-09-08 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      yo this was deep for real, and i'm adding it to my favs. lol by the way did you miss me?? haha. i missed me anyways this was good for real my favorite line was:
    Prostitutes making money on the corners giving brain
    Being betrayed by those whose loyalty we claim
    anyways keep 'em cumming.

    | Posted on 2006-08-03 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]


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