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    dots Submission Name: Downdots

    Author: Restless_Heart
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 44/35/16
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    I hate it,
    All of this fucked up shit,
    You say you love me,
    But it seems like your just leading me down,
    I can't understand,
    Half of whats going on,
    Because you never say whats on your mind,
    Claiming you want,
    Just to kiss me,
    Then letting the world know,
    How much you love someone else,
    Playing with me,
    Like some sort of a rag doll,
    Throwing me around,
    Pulling me apart
    Forgetting the most important part,
    You aren't the only one with feeling in her heart,
    No matter how much I cannot feel,
    It hurts so much when you kill me,
    Over and over,
    Not knowing,
    Whether or not to be ashamed,
    By all the things,
    I'll never say,
    No matter how much,
    I refuse to cry,
    Cause I wish not to see the pleasure,
    In your face.

    Submitted on 2006-07-29 23:44:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was very well written. But I would go back and try to make the lines even, ya know give it a little structure. I liked the topic this is on. I've been down that road. I had a girlfriend who played with me like I was nothing of importance, like I had no feelings... Its sickening if you ask me. How could someone be that way? I'm sorry for the hurt, pain, sorrow, etc... You feel, I all to well know the same. Great poem, keep up the awesome work..

    Sweet Blood Vampire
    | Posted on 2006-07-30 00:00:00 | by SweetX_XBlood | [ Reply to This ]

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