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    dots Submission Name: forgotten realitydots
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    Author: Tinasha
    ASL Info:    20/Female/Oklahoma City
    Elite Ratio:    3.96 - 100/142/41
    Words: 194
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    Description:
       we will all meet this day one day...but which day? an expression of my thoughts that is still under expressed....


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    dotsforgotten realitydots
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    i forgot about dying.
    i walk through day to day life living
    i forget it exists
    as it insists on claiming
    everyone of us.
    my mother and father
    sadly, one day will not be here
    and, God willing, if I am here
    will have to give them a proper farewell.
    tears streaming
    hearts beaming love
    and aching love
    and hurting love
    and loving love
    for the opportunity.
    i forget about dying sometimes
    i've never touched it or smelled it or felt it and have yet to taste it
    i wonder is it bitter or is it sweet
    ...or both.
    goodbye's are bittersweet
    wanting them here, but knowing they're there
    happy
    ...i hope
    on to better things
    ...i hope
    on to the better place
    ...i hope
    and pray and hope that life can return
    to the same undisturbed, unconscious living
    i remember so well.
    forgetting about dying
    until it strikes again
    forgetting about death
    until my tears are streaming again
    my heart beaming again
    with love and hurt
    and love and pain
    and love and love.
    i forgot about dying
    until i realized
    i was waiting
    and i remembered my home...




    Submitted on 2006-07-29 23:52:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey Tinasha,

    Brilliant poem. I love the repetition and the questions it raised. Awesome work,

    Steph.
    | Posted on 2006-07-30 00:00:00 | by steffunni | [ Reply to This ]


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